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Some people think that several short holidays from school are better, while others think one long summer holiday for the year is better for children. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and relevant examples from your experience.

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Holidays help the
children
 to get a break from education. Some people believe that
children
 should get a short vacation from school often
instead
 of long
summer
 holidays. In my
opinion
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children
 ought to get a long
summer
 vacation that would help the
children
 to involve in other activities apart from education.
This
 essay will discuss both views in the
the
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following paragraph.
Firstly
 , It's important for offspring to get festival sometimes. In short holidays,
heir
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an heir
the heir
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 can get refreshments from school education and they don't need to wait
the
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until the
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 end of the year to do something.
For example
, they can plan several small events during the short celebration.
On the other hand
 , If the youngster gets a long break in the year , It will help them to involve in
long term
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 activities , without worrying about homework from school.
Moreover
,
children
 can go on
summer
 vacation and register for other activities like
summer
 camp , singing classes and so on. In my conclusion,
children
 should get
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