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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#employers #focus #qualities #qualifications #someone #job
It is obvious that employers search for
best
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 workers
to
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 their businesses and the criteria
on
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 choosing possible candidates is between personal qualities and qualifications.
However
, certifications and
experience
 have significant importance in hiring new employees, I do believe that personal skills have much importance. On one hand, many graduates and
certifications
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 holders have no real
experience
on
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 their studies, we can see that lots of them
work
 in other fields which are not related to their qualifications.
As a result
, if the employers consider only one or two standards, it would be
a
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 wrong method.
For
example
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 sometimes accountants
work
 in sales and lawyers
work
 in accounting works,
therefore
 real
experience
 should matter on selecting someone for a job.
Although
 some resumes would give
impressive
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,
it
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 could be not real or accurate, some people try to cheat about their background and certifications.
On the other hand
, personal qualities are crucial because it reflects the personal skills and what the employees do have, how they would serve the
work
 environment and participate in the
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development
develpoment
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development
 of their company,
thus
 we should test the new candidates to be sure about
thier
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their
 abilities for
work
instead
 of
accept
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 due to their qualifications.
For
example
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 some companies impose hiring
policiy
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policy
 that each new worker should stay in training period for one or two
month
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 before getting
job
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a job
the job
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. I see it is a successful way and helps both
employer
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employers
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 and employees.
Similary
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Similarly
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, if someone does have the required skills and
experience
 for some job he wouldn't be worried to be in
training
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a training
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 period or
to pass
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 any test. In conclusion, while many employers focus on backgrounds and experienced individuals, I do support the view that personal qualities are so precious to consider
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