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The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.
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The two pie charts provide the percentages of several types of fuel consumed by the population in the United Kingdom in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the pie charts that people used less fuel of petroleum spirit in the
last
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 period,
while
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 other
fuels'
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fuels
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 consumption increased slightly. It is apparent that the proportion of expenditure on fuel resources by people, which coal
energy
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 consumed, was the highest, beginning at 30% in the year 2000 and gradually increasing by 1% after a decade, followed by gas at 29.5%.
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, 6.5% and 5% of all
energy
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 were
initially
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 solar and other
energy
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, respectively, after which both figures rose gradually to 10% and 9% in the final year.
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, the percentage of the
energy
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 resources of petrol that people consumed made up 29% in the year 2000, and
then
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 experienced a significant decline to 20% by the end of 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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