Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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who born in not a wealthy situation and atmosphere have a better
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for their rent, while if they have children, they will learn to always be aware of their
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will learn from their
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behaviour and actions.
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in
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wealthy
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and rich family
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not have any
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can be. It means, their
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always buy whatever they want and they do not talk about bills and
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will never what
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have a rich father
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about their future house or
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because they did not even think about it to find a way or work to make
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dreams
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their children will not have
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any concern or knowledge about those
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. To conclude,
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children
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who were grown
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wealthy
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and
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communities
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have no clues or
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or
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hand in poverty
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children
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will learn what are the
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and how they can deal with them.
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