Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Most
of
the people who were grown Change preposition
apply
poverty
or not a huge Change preposition
in poverty
amounts
of Correct the article-noun agreement
amount
money
will be more prepared to deal with financial problems
and issues
rather than group
of people Add an article
a group
which
have a Correct pronoun usage
who
luxury
life. I hundred Replace the word
luxurious
percent
agree with Change the spelling
per cent
this
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statement
statemnt
which in Correct your spelling
statement
this
essay will Correct your spelling
discuss
disccuss
.
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discuss
To begin
with, Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
who born in not a wealthy situation and atmosphere have a better Correct your spelling
children
undrestand
about financial Correct your spelling
understand
issues
, because their parents
and family are always have
to deal with these type of Change the verb form
always have
problems
and Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
in home Correct your spelling
children
wil
learn from their Correct your spelling
will
gurdians
and their knowledge will increase about what issue should deal in future. Correct your spelling
guardians
For example
, a family in rental
house has to always save Correct article usage
a rental
money
for their rent, while if they have children, they will learn to always be aware of their money
and bills. Thus
, Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
will learn from their Correct your spelling
children
parents
behaviour and actions.
Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
However
, the children who grows
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grow
in
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up in
wealthy
and rich family Add an article
the wealthy
a wealthy
does
not have any Correct subject-verb agreement
do
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perspective
prespective
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perspective
of
how Change preposition
on
problems
can be. It means, their parents
always buy whatever they want and they do not talk about bills and such
these
things, Correct determiner usage
apply
as a
result
their Add a comma
,result
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children
children's
childrens
will never what Correct your spelling
children
problems
can happen if you
do not have Correct pronoun usage
they
a
Remove the article
apply
money
. For instance
, young Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
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children
which
have a rich father Correct pronoun usage
who
are not worry
about their future house or Change the verb form
are not worried
Correct your spelling
vehicle
vehichle
because they did not even think about it to find a way or work to make Correct your spelling
vehicle
a
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apply
money
to reach their deams
. Correct your spelling
dreams
Hence
, when parents
do not talk about money
and financial issues
their children will not have a
any concern or knowledge about those Remove the article
apply
problems
.
To conclude, Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
who were grown Correct your spelling
children
in
wealthy Change preposition
up in
family
and Fix the agreement mistake
families
community
have no clues or Fix the agreement mistake
communities
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perspective
prespective
about financial Correct your spelling
perspective
problems
or issues
such
that, however
, on Correct your spelling
the
their
ther
hand in poverty Correct article usage
the ther
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children
childrens
will learn what are the Correct your spelling
children
problems
and how they can deal with them.Submitted by jaberi.mahyar on
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