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Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving and rock climbing

#people #government #ban #sports #rock
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often
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 argued that extreme
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 are very dangerous. That's why some
people
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 think that government should ban dangerous
sports
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,
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 as skydiving and rock climbing. In the following lines, I will develop my
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view point
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about
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 the subject. On the one hand, extreme
sports
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 maintain our
body
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 in shape.
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, to participate in
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 kind of sport, we need a serious workout routine. We have to be physically strong as every muscle of our anatomy is solicited during extreme
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.
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, many
people
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engage
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 in extreme
sports
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 have a great physique, tend to exercise more and have a healthy diet.
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, practising extreme
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 means meeting new
people
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. To put it differently, travel to
specifics
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 places is required to enjoy extreme
sports
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. Discovering
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different
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differents
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 cultures and making new friends come along.
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, the majority of
people
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 who prefer extreme
sports
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 have connections
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 the world.
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, extreme
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 have a high level of injuries. To put it simply, extreme
sports
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 are very dangerous and a
slightly
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 moment of inattention can result in serious wounds and perhaps
in
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death. As an example, a rock climber can die just because he
slide
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 while climbing
the
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 mountain.
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, extreme
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 are costly.
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,
people
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 who appreciate extreme
sports
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 spend a large amount of money on training and on equipment. As an illustration, the higher cost of
skydiving's
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 equipment. To conclude, extreme
sports
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 have merits and demerits
who
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 need to be considered. I strongly believe that
people
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 should have the right to
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practice
pratice
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practice
 it or not.
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