For Many people, the the reason they work hard is to earn more money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

For most
people
, the main cause why they have to
work
tough is to
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acquiere
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more
money
.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
statement because working
have
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might give the opportunity to obtain higher
education
, and
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acquiere
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a dream
house
. Most of the
times
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, severe
work
provide
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more opportunities to earn
money
to be able to pay
university's
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university

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tuitions
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and be able to obtain a higher
education
.
This
will offer a
high paying
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salary and
the
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feeling of satisfaction. When the pay is high, citizens tend to feel proud of themselves and
the
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their

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self-esteem increased.
Also
, having a
third
level of
education
will
decreased
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the job's stress because most
of
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the
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professionals
work
by using their knowledge and not their physical strength.
For instance
, a study from Fullerton College proves that
people
who had any type of degree or
high level
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education
is
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are

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promped
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to get a disease less frequent because they have more economical
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opportunities
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opportuniites
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to be treated and find more information
of
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their
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simptoms
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. Another good reason is that tough
work
will increase the opportunity to produce more
money
, and
finally
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acquiere
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a
house
. Nowadays,
apartment's
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rent is increasing steadily that sometimes is impossible to keep up with the
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montly
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payments;
however
, having the opportunity to buy a
house
is usually the result of having a decent job. More importantly, buying a
house
is
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as an investment because
eventually
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this
property will increase its value. To explain
further
, in The United States, ten years ago, the price of a
house
was less than half
of
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a million
dollar
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;
however
, these days any
house
is costing up to one million
dollar
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. To conclude, for some
people
the reason to
work
strenously
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strenuously

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hard is to collect
money
to obtain higher
education
,
high
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income, and
finally
purchase a
house
. I strongly believe these are essential reasons why
people
should make a bigger effort every day.
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