Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The two maps illustrate the future establishment of
bashire
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Bashir
bashing

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town's centre and its present situation. At present,at
very
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the very

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first
right
exit of
Mc
,
road
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the road

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there is a public park,facing the shops on the left side of the
road
and an accommodation, centre at the
second
left exit, the
third
exit at the left
join
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joins

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a small
street
,have a
farm
on the left of the
street
and Hoolihan
farm
on right_hand just above an open field ,situated bottom.
furthermore
,
Mc
road
is
then
linked to corbie
road
with a farmer's market
on
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at

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the bottom . In future,the
right
side of
mc
road
would be available only for housing area with the removal of shops from bottom left and market from the top left.the
farm
from the
right
top will be replaced with a big supermarket.whereas, Hoolihan
farm
,on the
right
of
mc
,
road
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the road

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will Will make a way for a parking lot.
moreover
,open filed have been replaced with supports centre ,apart from a roundabout at the junction of
road
and that
street
,corbie
road
extended beyond that
street
. Overall,backfire town will have undergone a drastic transformation from a rural town into an urban area in the future.All the farms have been removed in the days to come.
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