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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #focus #classroom #show #status #clothes #thebefore #school #uniforms
The two maps illustrate the future establishment of
bashire
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Bashir
bashing
 town's centre and its present situation. At present,at
very
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first
right
 exit of
Mc
 ,
road
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 there is a public park,facing the shops on the left side of the
road
 and an accommodation, centre at the
second
 left exit, the
third
 exit at the left
join
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 a small
street
 ,have a
farm
 on the left of the
street
 and Hoolihan
farm
 on right_hand just above an open field ,situated bottom.
furthermore
,
Mc
road
 is
then
 linked to corbie
road
 with a farmer's market
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 the bottom . In future,the
right
 side of
mc
road
 would be available only for housing area with the removal of shops from bottom left and market from the top left.the
farm
 from the
right
 top will be replaced with a big supermarket.whereas, Hoolihan
farm
 ,on the
right
 of
mc
 ,
road
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 will Will make a way for a parking lot.
moreover
,open filed have been replaced with supports centre ,apart from a roundabout at the junction of
road
 and that
street
 ,corbie
road
 extended beyond that
street
. Overall,backfire town will have undergone a drastic transformation from a rural town into an urban area in the future.All the farms have been removed in the days to come.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic focus
  • fashion trends
  • peer pressure
  • social class disparities
  • disciplinary environment
  • cost-effective
  • school identity
  • sense of belonging
  • individual expression
  • dress codes
  • professional attire
  • body types
  • school spirit
  • creativity suppression
  • equal footing
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