some students like to take distance- learning courses by computer. other students prefer to study in traditional classroom setting with a teacher. consider the advantage of both options and make an argument for the way the students should organise their schedule.

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Ms Mae Hall CBC Health Center 125 Parra Avenue 5098 September 24, 2022
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Re:
Mr
Peter Black, 62 years old Dear Ms Hall, Thank you for seeing
Mr
Peter Black who needs urgent attention. He was diagnosed with suicide attempts and needs your care.
Mr
Black has been addicted to gambling since 2 years ago, which resulted in debt and depression. His family cannot fathom
this
situation, they are angry but
also
exasperated regarding suicidal attempts.
Consequently
,
Mr
Black lost his friends. Currently, he has notable fatigue
also
no remorse seen and non-suicidal ideation.
Mr
Black is a retired bookkeeper in a car company. He is a chain smoker, smokes forty sticks a day and is a regular social drinker.
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, his wife works at Coles, and his son lives in Lyndon City. It is beneficial to book an appointment for gambling addiction therapy for his depression,
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, please stress the importance
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the Gambling Addiction Action Group. Afterwards,
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him to contact Quitline. Please include her wife in the care for supervision of his progress. I would be grateful if you could acquire him a framed wheelchair for the subsequent week and encourage him in social sports
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remind him to attend his regular follow-up appointment with Dr Murphy a psychologist . If you have any concerns, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Nurse
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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