The natural resources such as oil, and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

In
technological
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era with
increasing
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the increasing
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population in the world and
rapid
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the rapid
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growth of industries, people
use
more natural resources
such
as
oil
,
water
and forest. But these resources are limited and demanding and consumption is very high. It will be prevented by some solutions. I shall discuss some problems and give solutions in
coming
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paragraphs.
To begin
with,
oil
is
main
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the main
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energy
sources
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source
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and it is known as non-renewable . It will finish very soon because its demand
very
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is very
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high.
Oil
is used in
vehicle
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vehicles
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, industries, factories and
also
in
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the home
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home
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homes
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. At
industrial
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the industrial
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level we can
use
more public transport so definitely we
use
more
oil
resource
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resources
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. People are more educated so they can do some research and find alternate sources of energy it will benefit in future.
Secondly
,
water
is
main
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the main
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element for all. There can be no life without
water
.
water
is
most
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a most
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precious thing today. Fresh
water
level
use
of
water
continuously and recycle
water
whenever possible. Because all machines become hot so
water
will helpful for cooling down.
Water
is used in growing plants and
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trees
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tress
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trees
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.
Finally
, because of deforestation, many plants and animals are decreasing day by day. Animals and plants,
which
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apply
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provides
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provide
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us
food
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, medicine and other valuable products but they are facing extinction. We have
also
loose bio-diversity.
Moreover
, many
city
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cities
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expanding
the
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their
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areas so many forests area's
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trees
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tress
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trees
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cut
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are cut
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, so
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down, so
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soil
exposed
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is exposed
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to heavy rain and
also
washed away. Trees absorb carbon dioxide and it is very dangerous because it causes global warming.
Government
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will take some actions and take some strict rules for cutting
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trees
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tress
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trees
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.
Also
human
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humans
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can grow some
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trees
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tress
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trees
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in
area
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the area
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for
few
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a few
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months and years so that day is not far when we will have greenery
in
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apply
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all over. In conclusion, I would like to say
oil
,
water
, and forests are very much
demand
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in demand
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and necessary. If we have to survive on earth so we
use
them very carefully for our better future.
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