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Government should invest in teaching science subjects rather than other subjects for country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

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he
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The
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last
 century has witnessed the booming of car industries, and there are more and more cars driving on the road nowadays.
That is
, the introduction of private transportation surely enhances the mobilities of
people
 living in
the
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urban.
However
, from my perspective, there is a desperate need for
vehicle-free
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the vehicle-free
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day
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 since the so-called automobile still brings a lot of inconveniences. It is undoubted that the scooter or car brings us to a more convenient world with the soaring proportion of
cars
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 ownership.
To begin
 with, for those who demand to drive to work every
day
, private transportation allows them to commute to every place even every time. There is no need to concern that leaving the office at midnight and the metro doesn't available.
Also
, it is suitable for commodities that are transited by truck, which is not limited by rail, making it more effective.
Last
 but not least, when we walk or ride bicycles in the city, the weather is a vital condition that we have to confront, while
people
 who are behind the wheel
doesn't
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influence
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.
Nonetheless
, a
day
that is
 only for the MRT, cycle and buses still
give
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 a different aspect to the city as it makes
people
 healthier not only physical but mental.
First
 of all, needless to say, taking the subway or train truly reduces air pollution, letting
people
 breathe pure air.
Secondly
, the
banned
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 on automobile prevent
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pedestrian from getting hurt, decreasing the number of traffic accident.
Last
 but not least, the
day
 car-free alleviates the circumstances of congestion. During rush hour, it is not weird to see that the road becomes a "dynamic parking place" and the path is filled with loud hink because of the
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 traffic jam. With the car-free
day
, we may experience silence, peace and a fast city, which is very worth trying. In sum, there is some advantage to riding the scooter or driving the car to commute to another place, but if there is an option of a
vihicle
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vehicle
-free
day
 there is still a lot of advantages that encourage
people
 to give it a shot.
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