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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Have you ever thought about the
problems
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 of living in a foreign
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that
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 you have to speak a new
language
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? It is obvious that it may
cause
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 a lot of practical and
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problems
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. In
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 essay, I would mention the important social
problems
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 of living in a foreign
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 of all, it would
cause
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 psychological
problems
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. As well as we could not speak or understand people of that area,
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 it is clear that we could not find friends. As we do not have any friends, we never have the chance of sharing experiences with one another, not having the chance to take part in parties and
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 not have anyone to understand and listen to us when we are in a bad situation, in one word makes us isolated. Social exclusion in long term can
cause
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 depression. Apart from that, working in a
country
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 with a strange
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 can affect our employment situation. Could not understand the tasks clearly, showing us as
an inefficient employees
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. The more misunderstanding, the worse the situation becomes and
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 that can
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 layoff. After that, financial
problems
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 will occur. In conclusion, it was agreed that to live in a foreign
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, fluency in their
language
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 is a significant need which may
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 many
problems
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 as psychological and financial if not fulfilled.Living in a
country
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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 can
cause
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 serious social
problems
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, as well as practical
problems
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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