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Fast food has become so popular worldwide that it is destroying the nutritional quality of food. What do you think because of this the traditional food and cooking method is being forgotten? Do you agree or disagree with the statement give reasons for your answer?

#food #quality #method
It is claimed that fast
food
 gained popularity in the world so it is reducing the nutritional
quality
 of the
food
 and because of
this
, traditional cooking methods or preparation of some
food
 can be forgotten. As far as I am concerned, I agree with
this
 statement and it has a destructive effect on the
quality
 of
food
, and traditional
food
 types and ways of cooking are under the threat of forgetting. In almost everywhere in the world,
for instance
, in
the
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apply
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offices, classes or houses, the usage of junk
food
 is skyrocketed and it takes a toll on the
quality
 of
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nutrition
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nutritions
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nutrition
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 in the
food
. Due to the high demand
on
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for
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 junk
food
,
for example
,
such
 as burgers, the chefs tend to prepare them in advance and
depends
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depend
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 on the orders, heating them again within seconds to serve;
therefore
, it directly has significant effects on the
quality
 of
burger
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the burger
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 itself and the ingredients used there.
Moreover
, using more ready meals brings new habits and erases traditional ones,
such
 as eating staple
food
first
 or having a proper dinner. People now hesitate to bring back old habits and
in contrast
, use
substitutionial
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substitutional
substitution
 ones more,
for example
, clicking some buttons for choosing, ordering, paying and receiving by various websites or mobile apps. In conclusion, it is mentioned that fast
food
 obtained popularity in the world,
hence
 it is diminishing the nutritional
quality
 of
food
 and owing to
this
, traditional cooking techniques or
food
 preparation can be forgotten. I am for the given statement and the issues that fast
food
 brought to the communities
are
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mentioned.
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