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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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The graph shows us types of
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 changing trends connected to the consumption of different sweet food. Here we can see the description of 3 types of sweet food: honey,
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 and
cane
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sugar
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.
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 of all, we can see that the honey's line of effect on
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level
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 seems more friendly than others. The
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level
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 goes down less rapidly.
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, we can notice the Plato of the
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level
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 between the 5th and 10th minutes. After the Plato, the
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 raises straight to the up with a good speed and at the 25th minute raises the top point.
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,
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sugar
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also
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 looks friendly in comparison to
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sugar
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. The
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level
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 affected by
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sugar
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 goes deeper than in honey's case, but not enough deep as
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sugar
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, after reaching the bottom point the
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's
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 goes back to the top smoothly, without any plates and stops. In the end,
cane
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sugar
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 is the most dangerous for our
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level
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. The healing of
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 after
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sugar
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's effect takes a lot of time - at least 40 minutes.
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 a worthy mark in
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 research.
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