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Many people say we should invest more in space industry while others say we should spend that money on other purposes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar charts show the kilometres of individual transport every year in six European countries and provide information about the amount of
time
 with commutation each day.

Overall, the average
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traveling
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 distance for Europeans by automobiles is greater than those by bus, train, metro and bike.
In addition
, the commuting
time
 in those nations
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 under one hour every day.

The number of kilometres for people who travel in Denmark by taking any transport took the lead, which was around 12500 by car, and 3000 by public transport or bike.
In contrast
, France saw the greatest difference in the annual travel distance, which was at 12000 by car and only one-tenth by other transportation. It is worth noting that Italian taking transportation spent the least
time
 with just over 20 minutes.
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,
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 spent the most
time
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commuting, at about 48 minutes per day.
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distance
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 people in Germany and Spain driving cars are very similar, which were about 90000 and 88000 kilometres, respectively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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