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some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

#people #men #women #job #jobs
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of
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people believe that
women
 do any
job
 as they are equal
as
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men
. but others feel that
women
 are not suitable
most
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of
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jobs as they are only for
men
.
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 the one hand,
women
 and
men
 are equal rights. they both can do any kind of
job
what
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 they want. There is no difference between
men
 and
women
. In society, most people believe that both can participate in any field of work may it be labour, farmer,
gardner
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gardener
Gardner
, engineer , doctor, etc. and I agree.
On the other hand
, few people
also
 believe that most
of
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jobs are only for
men
 not for
women
.
Women
 can'
t
 do any kind of
job
,
women
 have specific jobs that they can do. they believe that they are not equal
as
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men
. They don'
t
 have mental and
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physical
phsycial
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physical
 strength like
men
. They can'
t
 work
any
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 field. In conclusion, we should believe that all human beings are equal.
Men
 and
women
 have
same
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 power. They
are equally treat
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. They can do any work or
job
 may it be
men
 or
women
. Society should accept
this
 truth and don'
t
 do any kind difference of
men
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 and
women
.
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