Video games have become so widespread in recent years. What are the benefits and harms of video games?

Video
games
have become so widespread in recent years.
Therefore
, some benefits and harms occur.
Firstly
,Gamers who play
video
games
improve their cognitive function
such
as solving problems, sensing, thinking and feeling.
For instance
when ı played "God of War" which is about a Spartan man fighting against gods.There were some riddles that ı had to solve. I struggled a lot trying to solve the riddles in the beginning. I got better day by day and that's why my thinking and problem-solving abilities are way better than before. The
second
benefit of
video
games
is hand and eye coordination. Strategic and FPS
games
improve hand and eye coordination. Because these types of
games
are based on killing each other,
therefore
, you have to improve your reflexes. İf you can improve your reflexes you will be a better player and
time
by
time
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you get better hand and eye coordination. Apart from these, playing
video
games
has harmful effects like creating an asocial crowd. Nowadays, online
games
are the most common among gamers and if you want to be successful in online
games
you should spend your hours here. If you are a student or worker you have limited
time
for gaming and meeting with friends and for some people
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in online
games
is the most satisfying feeling. As a
consequence
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some people would rather spend their
time
playing
video
games
than meeting friends. To sum
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playing
video
games
has pros and cons. These situations are depended on people's behaviour and decisions.
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