Some people believe that the most important aspect of their job is their salary. Others think that the job itself is the most important. What do you think is the most important aspect of a job? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

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Nowadays,
job
satisfaction is defined differently based on the perspective of each person. Many
people
think that a high paid
salary
plays the most vital role in getting a
job
.
However
, others argue that
money
is not everything because they are satisfied with their current jobs for
another reasons
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another reason
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. The following paragraphs will present my point of view on both sides with examples to
support
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itsupport
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.
First
of all,
salary
is one of the strongest
motivation
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motivations
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to
work
. It is undeniable that
money
is extremely crucial to maintain
the
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a
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normal life and no one can survive without having
money
.
For example
, a normal employee has to use
monthly
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their monthly
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salary
to pay for the basic demand of human beings
such
as buying
foods
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food
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, paying for rental
fee
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fees
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and feeding the kids.
Additionally
, if they get
the
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high paid
salary
, they might have more
chance
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chances
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to do whatever they want.
For instance
, they can take their family to travel
in
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different countries in order to broaden their eyes and explore the world. They
also
can save
the
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apply
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money
for
the
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future purpose and use the surplus to invest in stocks in order to get more margin and enhance their financial potential.
On the other hand
, a group of
people
argues that the
organization
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organisational
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culture is the most vital aspect of working. If we
work
in a healthy working environment where all employees are respected and have
the
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an
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equal chance to develop themselves, it will be very great in the long run no matter how much we can get from the current
salary
. In
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contrast
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contract
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contrast
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, if you
work
in
the
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workplace where your boss always shouts at you whenever you cannot reach the sales target, you might face
with
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the
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health problems not only
metal
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mental
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but
also
physical because of being depressed.
Moreover
, the
job
itself can be the most important in some cases. There are several
persons
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people
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who select the
job
because they love it.
For example
, a friend of mine who is living in Da Nang City decided to be the kinder garden teacher because of her love
to
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for
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the kids. Even though her paid
salary
is quite low in
comparing
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comparison
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to other jobs, she is really enjoying her current
job
. In conclusion, I believe that the
job
satisfaction of each person is not the same. Some
people
go to
work
because of
money
while
another
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other
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people
find
the
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interesting things in other aspects. Personally, I absolutely believe that
money
is critical but it is not everything. Importantly, no matter why we are working, we have to feel happy and enjoy doing our
job
because we only
one
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have one
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life to live.
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