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Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employer’s organization say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Talent acquisition and retention are most difficult for a
company
, if you have a talented worker
then
 it is a gem. If the top-level employee has some unique talent,
then
 the
company
 appreciate the
work
 and gives monetary rewards.
This
 type of worker should be required to achieve the employer's vision and goals so they do not have taken to many parts in day-to-day
work
. To commence with , for a growing
company
 it is required that the top leaders have the talent to build the team and lead. they have the ability that how to make plans and them implement. ,
furthermore
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 they are having separate plans, visions, missions and goals and achieve that.
Furthermore
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 they
also
 guide the other employee and helps them, solve their problems and complete targeted
work
. Companies always try to fulfil the demands in terms of a high percentage of increment of giving some stake in the
company
. In the
market
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 there are fewer,
this
 type of people who have the technical know-how and strength to
work
 on it. In ,addition directors have more power with responsibility and have the capacity to take risks and with knowledge and ,
the
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experience they will be successful.
for example
, a Few days ago in a newspaper,paper there is news regarding the appraisal given by the
company
 which is a 150% hike with a 5% stake in the
company
. In my point of ,view if the
company
 have efficient directors
then
, it is valid to give suge huge increment, they prove themself and
also
 grow the
company
 to top level in that particular industry.
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