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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been discussion revolving around the issue of whether
museums
 are a
place
 where
people
 get educated or it is an amusing
place
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places
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 to get entertained. I tend to believe that
exhibition
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the exhibition
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center
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centre
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 should be a
place
 of education. In
this
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 I will explain my opinion. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that
museums
 are tourist’s biggest attraction
place
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places
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.
For example
,
people
 who come to visit any country tend to stop by the
museums
 to be entertained. It is that because places like
this
 manage to put exhibitions that are interesting or somehow
be
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appealing to the customers.
Moreover
, it is a perfect
place
 to entertain
children
.
For example
, it sparks
children
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children's
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 curiosity and
get
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gets
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 them to be excited
for
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about
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 school. It is for
the
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this
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 reason that
museums
 are predisposed to have exhibitions that keep
children
 interested.
In contrast
,
some
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others may claim that
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museums
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museums'
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 goal is to educate. To start with,
children
 or adults who are going to
museums
 learn about different cultures,
historical
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and historical
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 events and it can develop the perfect mindset for young
people
 which
help
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helps
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to
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them to
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 sympathize or identify with other
people
. Another argument can be made that it allows
people
 to find their interests in life through authentic demonstrations that are held in
museums
. Having considered both views I believe that
museums
 are beneficial for educational purpose because it helps to find yourself and
ne
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new
 interests which can lead to expanding your mind and worldview later on in life.
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