Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?
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computers
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computers
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to cut down bad effects.
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children
children's
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games
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ability as compared to generation Z. In order to reduce Replace the word
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effect one should have to Correct your spelling
encourage
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their children to play Correct your spelling
encourage
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problem-solving
games
instead
of regular games
.
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are effecting
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affecting
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apply
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children's
childrens
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parents have to stricly
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strictly
time
to use the screen such
as an hour in a day. Also
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activities
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impact which have
seen is less social interaction. Teenagers who spend Change the verb form
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times
on Fix the agreement mistake
time
games
are forgetting about the outdoor games
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and cutting down Remove the comma
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with
meeting people and making friends. Having lesser social Change preposition
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interaction
interactions
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they
can know the importance of social interaction.
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children
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children
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