Some people work for the same organisation all their working life.Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.Discuss both these views and give for opinion

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working with the same company, while some
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believe that doing
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with
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different organization is much better. Here I will discuss both views below, but In my
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working with
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different groups is better.
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the individual working with the different association is better because it increases the growth and skills of the
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also
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the salary of the
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recent study shows that
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.
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institutes trust
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that employee for their hard work and dedication and the employee feels secure in the organization. He
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gradually. To conclude
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work
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with different
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makes the growth of the person.
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with different institutes is much better.
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