In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Nowadays, Authorities should be encouraging large
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to move urban areas for their region outside of the developed cities. There are various kinds of advantages and disadvantages as well I will discuss in the upcoming fourth paragraphs.
To begin
with the advantages, The growing
industries
sities
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cities
sites
will be rising and so many job opportunities will be available for their nation unemployed person works. To explain, The law-maker will be trying to
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harmful
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on their environment and community because
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Commercials areas will be populated by
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good
businesses
in their
country's
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countries
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.
For instance
, In Russia news reveal that headlines the
large
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industries
such
as Chemical brand will huge impact on their society and
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government will move bad
industries
so far
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in
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their developed big
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.
Thus
, It will be beneficial for their nation and
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health. To commence with the disadvantage, The large
businesses
will be declined for outside the city's and companies product sale's rates down and it will
be impact
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on their
region
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economy. To explicated, The
industries
will be far away for their daily consumers and its problems for their users and
company's
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as the same effect
for
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any nation's currencies.
For example
, In Australian big
industry
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industries
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such
as Nike
shoes
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brand
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brands
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will be located
on
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outside of the city it's being annoying for
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consumer and useless for their work.
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, The
businesses
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site
of
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cities
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for
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their work and company users. In conclusion,
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many authorities will be
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big field to go way far
their
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develop
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cities.
Moreover
, it will be disappointing for their customers and
also
for
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and
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will be
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lost
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from their unuseful decisions by the laws and rules.
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