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1. I think
the significant changes phase
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 which encompasses the earliest 19th till 20th century indicates the flourishment of the History of Azerbaijan with the relief of Abbasgulu agha Bakukhanov who was the prominent author of “Gulustani Iram” and others. As a matter of fact, one of his innovations seems to be the chronology of
Azerbaijan
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 history. Another possible reason was an enlightening civilization which was driven by Mirza Fatali Akhundov, Seyid Azim Shirvani, Hasanbay Zardabi, and others. 2.In general, historical discipline signifies the chronological record of several events in terms of critical analysis. The origins of the historical field date back to the history of Albania in which some written
sources
 are found by Moisey Kalankatuklu and Moisey Dashuranli. Some folk literature and works
such
 as “Koroghlu” and “Gulustani Iram” are outstanding historical
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 in Azerbaijan. 3.There is a way to access past data that seems to be eliciting information from historical
sources
.
Furthermore
, there is a preface assortment of
sources
 that are not equivalent to each other. Oral (legends, tales, bayatis), material (stone tools, handicraft wares,), linguistic (disparate information concerning languages), ethnographic (family traditions of different nations), written (handwritings and a lot of monuments), and Cinema-Photo-Phonodocuments are the main example for the historical
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