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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason some job are better done by men and others by women. do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #terms #characteristics #abilities #reason #job
Male and
female
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females
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 are different in
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their personality and behaviour. I totally agree with
this
 opinion that some
job
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 are better for
women
 and some for
men
 and in the following essay I will give the
reason
 clearly.
Firstly
, both gender
are
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 different
by
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physically,
mentally
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and mentally
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.
In other words
, science
also
believe
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 that
men
 have more power to do hard and heavy
work
 because of the
body
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 energy and
structural
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.
For example
, more labour
work
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doing
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done
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 by males rather
then
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than
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women
.
Thus
, in the many factors recorded
men
.
Second
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 main
reason
 is that, safety and
kids
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kids'
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 responsibility.
To
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For
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 instance, in many countries
women
 are not so safe to
work
 every place
in
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 any time because of
this
 some
work
type
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types
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 are different two
of
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them,
however
, the other
reason
 is
women
 have more
responsibility
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responsibilities
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 like kids and household related to they can do every word
any thing
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anything
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 and
men
 can do.
As a result
, in
India
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,India
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their
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 are few rape
case
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 done in past years so parents do not allow their lady child to
work
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night shifts.
Hence
, less safety
also
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 the main
reason
 for
difference
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the difference
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 between the
work
 type.
In
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 the opposite
the
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they
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 agree,in the present day
women
also
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are also
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 so hard working and safe. To explain it,
women
also
working
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 related to 'IT' Medical related field as well as in factories for labour
work
 girls and boy are equal. To clear
this
, in
the
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developed nation like
usa
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USA
uk
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UK
Uk
 Canada
women
working
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 freely anytime anywhere. In conclusion,
male
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males
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 are
female
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females
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 are different by
body
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the body
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 by strength
also
women
 have more home
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work
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word
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work
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 to do
many
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 other life
also
depent
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depends
 it. But
also
women
 and do anything which
men
 do.
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apply
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It
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 I stand in my point that both have
different
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job
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 their ability.
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