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You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter Say what experience you have Ask what the work involves Enquire about conditions

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have seen the advert that your hotel Sunbeam is looking for a part-time chef during the peak hours for
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 summer only. I would like to apply for
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 job as I have experience
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working as a junior chef in one of the hotels in Malaysia.
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, can you please tell me in detail what type of work you are looking for
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 I can help in cooking different food types especially, Italian and Indian cuisine. I have 2 years of experience in cooking.
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, If you want a person who only has to wash the dishes
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, I am not the suitable person for that.
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, I would like to know how much you will pay me for working as a cook and what are the working hours.
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 that, I have a small request that I cannot work for late nights as I have a family so I have to go home by 9'o
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 in the evening. I hope you take
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 into account. Looking forward to your positive reply. Yours Sincerely, Shikha
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task achievement
Try to elaborate a bit more on your experience and skills to make your application stronger.
coherence cohesion
It would be beneficial to organize your paragraphs a bit more clearly. For example, separate your questions about the type of work and working conditions for better clarity.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task and provided a courteous tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, maintaining a polite and formal tone suitable for a job application.
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