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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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To attain quick
success
, people usually copy the formula which has worked for others and
hopes
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 to attain successful results easily. But the path to
success
 is hidden in finding your own way and not by using set structures. Many fashion influencers tend to replicate high-brand clothing items and fail to give all the necessary
credits
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 and I completely disagree with
this
 gesture.
Firstly
, humans have the tendency to compare
other's
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others'
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success
 with theirs and tend to develop jealousy. They don't compare
other's
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others'
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 struggles but push themselves to attain
success
 like someone else which not only
hamper
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hampers
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 their growth but
deviate
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 them from their desired goals. And same has been observed in the fashion industry.
For example
, it is hard for people to buy branded clothes so local markets tend to copy the style and colour of a branded
product
 and sell them at a cheaper price.
Furthermore
,
this
 causes big brands to lose their market value and lose genuine customers.
Secondly
, the same thing has
also
 been observed in the
music
 industry where a new creator copies some part of original
music
 and tries to market the
product
 to consumers.
For example
, on social media platforms like Youtube and Facebook, users replicate the same form of art and tweak it a little bit and earn money from it.
However
, to stop
this
 and maintain the credibility of the
product
 Youtube has started now to ban videos or
music
 which is even slightly derived from its original
music
 and force the user to prove the authenticity of the
product
.
Lastly
, governments have become more active in dealing with
this
 situation. More than 45% of motion pictures are certified by many authorising companies to centralise the cash flow to its true creator. To conclude, it is advisable that everyone is responsible to maintain the true value of any
product
 and if copied must not be sold under any name.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherently social creatures
  • acceptance and validation
  • peer influence
  • fashion trends
  • consumer behavior
  • media influence
  • celebrities
  • social media platforms
  • trend adoption
  • mass production
  • fast fashion
  • accessibility
  • unique identity
  • mainstream trends
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