In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is more important Discuss both views and give your opinion

Across many countries and
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there are various differences with regards
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much reverence is conferred onto old
age
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youthfulness
. Overall, both young and old
people
are important to any system or country.
However
, old
people
have a lot of wisdom that they have gained through experience which is hard to replicate and thereby old
age
should be valued more. The wisdom that elders have is very important because they have had more
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successful
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and failed attempts at several tasks than the number of times the current generation has even tried. It means that their experience with regards to what works and what
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work in business, life and several other areas is very valuable. Young
people
should ideally consider old
people
as their mentors and follow their advice for much quicker and better results. As wisdom combined with youthful energy would be a very good combination.
On the other hand
, If young
people
only follow the experiences of their older counterparts, they will not be creating anything new or revolutionary. The new generation brings
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energy, creativity and dynamism to any situation and they
also
have the ability to observe , change and
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in areas that
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their
thier
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previous generations could not. So, the situation is not black and white, it is grey and the youth of any generation can
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seismic changes across all domains
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life. Concluding, while old
age
is valued and rightly so, we need a fine balance where we are revering and giving attention to both the experience that old
age
brings as well the energy , dynamism and creativity that young
people
engender. Combining, both of these values in a balanced manner is the best way for society to operate, balance and regenerate itself.
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  • esteemed
  • insights
  • embedded
  • seeking advice
  • prioritizing
  • premium on innovation
  • dynamism
  • adaptability
  • technological advancements
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