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It is important for children to learn the difference between right nad wrong at n early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should be parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.

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Knowing between right and wrong is the basic principle to be human.Nowadays,
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 generation
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 bother about their actions. Adapting different solutions, Correction becomes the only solution to get the results.To examine
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 will support the agreement opinion. And try to elaborate
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discuss
disccuss
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 what type of penalty Parents and teachers need to give the students to improve their actions in
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 manner.
For example
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 started to smoke. I would say
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 their loved one responsibility to take care of their child.
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 is sitting and what kind of activities
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, I would say banned the pocket money of the
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 to make him realize what wrong he is doing.
On the other hand
, if parents and
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 don't teach the kids about the wrong and right things.
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 is a big possibility that
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 their
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children
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 says that
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its
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 easy to change the hobbies and habits of a person
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 early age as compared to when a person
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adult
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an adult
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.
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 should be pre-school courses where they have to teach the students about good behaviour towards the community. To conclude
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 would say parents and teachers
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 the social responsibility to teach student good ethics. Because by doing
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, kids will be more responsible and better serve the country.
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