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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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It is believed that as more consumer goods are manufactured more damage
hass
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has
 been inflicted
to
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 the
environment
. In my opinion, one of the reasons is the increasing demand for
people
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 consumption
lead
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 to
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 industrial waste amounts emit into the atmosphere. I believe there are lots of methods to cope with
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the world's population is increasing day by day which is one of
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reason
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 for pollution.
As
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 the growth of
population
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, it is believed that nothing can save when a human change their mind about safe their life
environment
.
For example
, according to statistics on waste in rivers in Hanoi,
the
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industrial activities are the way to cause
the
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water pollution by littering and low awareness
that
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makes To Lih river one of the most polluted rivers in Hanoi. There is some solution
of
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goods
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good
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consuming
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consumption
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, the politicians impose punishment on
people
 who harm
to
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the
environment
.
Secondly
, oil
expoilation
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exploitation
 is a way to
deleption
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deception
deletion
 of natural resources.
For instance
, some famous brands of drink started an activity
that
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 the drink will be discounted if the
costumers
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customers
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 bring their own
cuo
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cup
. It can be seen that there
are
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very
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a very
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 good
idea
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 for reducing the goods in plastic as
raise
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 awareness for the residents with these activities will
creates
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 a good habit for
people
 to save the community
environment
.
To
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 conclusion, the government and
people
 need to join a hand in manufacturing process more environmentally friendly.
Beside
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 that having awareness of protecting
environment
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the environment
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 will bring
a
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healthier convenient and cleaner air for
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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