Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects .But others Believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or they find the most interesting .Discuss both views and give an opinion.

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In the present age, whether teenagers should concentrate on all school
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rather than focusing on the
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that they are best at or they find the most interesting has sparked much debate. Some people assert that students should concentrate on all school
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, whereas many others argue that they should focus on the
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that they are best at. I will explore both arguments and give my opinion. Convincing arguments can be made that teenagers should concentrate on all school
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, and most importantly, having a
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set of skills is more beneficial than having
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one
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more polished skill.
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, being good at math might lend you a
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job, but if it doesn't you need other skills to have a backup plan.
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, if everyone had a more
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skill set much
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people would be unemployed. There are plenty of jobs that need a variety of skills,
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is why having them would come in handy.
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, some others may claim that students should focus on the
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that they are best at or they find the most interesting. For starters, focusing on
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allows you to spend most of your time on it.
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you get
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very polished skill. Which might land you a
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job. It is
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important to note that focusing on
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subject
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is easier and way less stressful. Being less stressed all the time increases your productivity and overall
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. Having considered both views, I think students should focus on all
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will result in a positive impact on tackling unemployment.
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