Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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act as a
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part of our life as each family owned at least one.
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heavy traffic
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all around the world, and these can
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government
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start to take action. There are many ways that
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in reduced the
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of using
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cars
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short journey can
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a bike or just
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on your own.
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, they can introduce a more useful public transport system for people daily basis. The bus or train comes on time and systematically will bring more
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confidence
to the users.
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will show a great decline in the
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of
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if the program is running successfully.
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, the tax for buying
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should be increased as
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direct way can reduce
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car
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ownership. People who cannot afford the taxes should try
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like public transport
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the
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transportation. It is true that the roads now have always
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by
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cars
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. A very good example shows
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me that usually journey from Parit Raja to Johor Bahru
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90 minutes,
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become at least 120 minutes, especially on holidays. Many
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families
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have more than one
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now, as we can observe by the
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parking outside their house.
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results in a bad situation as the number of
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gradually increases. In conclusion, the number of owning
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can be controlled by the government if they really focus on the problem and
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the action.
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