IMPROVEMENTS IN HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE ARE ESSENTIAL FOR THE DEVELOPMENT OF POORER NATIONS. HOWEVER,THE GOVERNMENTS OF RICHER NATIONS SHOULD TAKE MORE RESPONSIBILITY FOR HELPING THE POORER NATIONS IN SUCH AREAS. DO you agree or disagree with opinion?
Development in health , education and commerce are indispensable for the development of poor
nations
. However
the governments of richer Add a comma
,However
nations
should take more responsibility to support the poorer nations
in such
region
. I agree with Fix the agreement mistake
regions
this
idea because poorer nations
need fund
rather than rich Fix the agreement mistake
funds
nations
.
Firstly
, Rich nations
have got more opportunities than poorer nations
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, therefore,
therefore
they should help them. They can not take equal responsibility because poorer nations
can not send a lot
of money
to other nations
. Extensive research conducted by CNBC revealed that rich nations
should send a lot
of money
to poorer nations
. İt is a very sensible idea because rich nations
are already rich. Poorer nations
are miserable. They need immediately fund
if other Correct subject-verb agreement
funds
nations
help them they will grow and reach peak
. Correct pronoun usage
their peak
For example
, Luxembourg
community are one of the wealthies community in the world. Correct article usage
the Luxembourg
On the other
hand
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,hand
Bulgaria
community are very miserable they have got a lot
of issues. İf Luxembourg should fund to
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apply
Bulgaria
, Bulgaria
will improve sources
and purchasing power. İt will make a really close connection between Correct pronoun usage
its sources
Bulgaria
and Luxembourg.
Secondly
, donating money
to Poorer nations
is very important behaviour. İt will make a peace in the world. Rich nations
must be take
enormous responsibility to do that. A study carried out by Cambridge University showed that people Change the verb form
take
rich
Change preposition
in rich
nations
should be generous and well-mannered. Money
will increase if they donate to other nations
. İf rich nations
give money
to poorer nations
, poorer nations
would be very cheerful. solidarity is very sensible because nations
have to be good
Add an article
a good
relationship
with other Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
nations
. İn my opinion rich nations
must help to
other Change preposition
apply
nations
for improvement. Rich nations
are very powerful therefore
they can make Correct article usage
an affort
affort
to help other Correct your spelling
effort
nations
. Rİch nations
must sensitive
and make Add a missing verb
be sensitive
a
empathy Change the article
an
to
other regions. If they made they would understand and help them.
To conclude, poorer Change preposition
with
nations
can not help rich nations
but rich nations
can donate a lot
of money
to poorer nations
. Rich nations
must help them and both of them will improve.Submitted by brsson06 on
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