IMPROVEMENTS IN HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE ARE ESSENTIAL FOR THE DEVELOPMENT OF POORER NATIONS. HOWEVER,THE GOVERNMENTS OF RICHER NATIONS SHOULD TAKE MORE RESPONSIBILITY FOR HELPING THE POORER NATIONS IN SUCH AREAS. DO you agree or disagree with opinion?

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Development in health , education and commerce are indispensable for the development of poor
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the governments of richer
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should take more responsibility to support the poorer
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. I agree with
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idea because poorer
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rather than rich
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have got more opportunities than poorer
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they should help them. They can not take equal responsibility because poorer
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can not send a
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to other
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. Extensive research conducted by CNBC revealed that rich
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should send a
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of
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to poorer
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. İt is a very sensible idea because rich
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are already rich. Poorer
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are miserable. They need immediately
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if other
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help them they will grow and reach
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community are one of the wealthies community in the world.
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Bulgaria
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community are very miserable they have got a
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of issues. İf Luxembourg should fund
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Bulgaria
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will improve
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and purchasing power. İt will make a really close connection between
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and Luxembourg.
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to Poorer
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is very important behaviour. İt will make a peace in the world. Rich
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enormous responsibility to do that. A study carried out by Cambridge University showed that people
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should be generous and well-mannered.
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will increase if they donate to other
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give
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to poorer
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, poorer
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would be very cheerful. solidarity is very sensible because
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have to be
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relationship
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with other
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must help
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other
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for improvement. Rich
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are very powerful
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other regions. If they made they would understand and help them. To conclude, poorer
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can not help rich
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but rich
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can donate a
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of
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to poorer
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. Rich
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must help them and both of them will improve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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