IMPROVEMENTS IN HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE ARE ESSENTIAL FOR THE DEVELOPMENT OF POORER NATIONS. HOWEVER,THE GOVERNMENTS OF RICHER NATIONS SHOULD TAKE MORE RESPONSIBILITY FOR HELPING THE POORER NATIONS IN SUCH AREAS. DO you agree or disagree with opinion?

Development in health , education and commerce are indispensable for the development of poor
nations
.
However
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the governments of richer
nations
should take more responsibility to support the poorer
nations
in
such
region
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regions
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. I agree with
this
idea because poorer
nations
need
fund
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funds
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rather than rich
nations
.
Firstly
, Rich
nations
have got more opportunities than poorer
nations
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therefore
they should help them. They can not take equal responsibility because poorer
nations
can not send a
lot
of
money
to other
nations
. Extensive research conducted by CNBC revealed that rich
nations
should send a
lot
of
money
to poorer
nations
. İt is a very sensible idea because rich
nations
are already rich. Poorer
nations
are miserable. They need immediately
fund
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if other
nations
help them they will grow and reach
peak
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their peak
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.
For example
,
Luxembourg
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the Luxembourg
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community are one of the wealthies community in the world.
On the other
hand
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Bulgaria
community are very miserable they have got a
lot
of issues. İf Luxembourg should fund
to
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Bulgaria
,
Bulgaria
will improve
sources
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its sources
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and purchasing power. İt will make a really close connection between
Bulgaria
and Luxembourg.
Secondly
, donating
money
to Poorer
nations
is very important behaviour. İt will make a peace in the world. Rich
nations
must
be take
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enormous responsibility to do that. A study carried out by Cambridge University showed that people
rich
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nations
should be generous and well-mannered.
Money
will increase if they donate to other
nations
. İf rich
nations
give
money
to poorer
nations
, poorer
nations
would be very cheerful. solidarity is very sensible because
nations
have to be
good
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a good
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relationship
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relationships
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with other
nations
. İn my opinion rich
nations
must help
to
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other
nations
for improvement. Rich
nations
are very powerful
therefore
they can make
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affort
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effort
to help other
nations
. Rİch
nations
must
sensitive
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and make
a
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empathy
to
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other regions. If they made they would understand and help them. To conclude, poorer
nations
can not help rich
nations
but rich
nations
can donate a
lot
of
money
to poorer
nations
. Rich
nations
must help them and both of them will improve.
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  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
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