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Money offered for post graduate research is limited; as a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

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 providing
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projects
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 that are done to declare a special subject which previously has been done by other researches. These researches are mostly utilized to illustrate the knowledge of the writers and do not necessarily
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 a vital piece of research which can be as important as many subjects. Nowadays
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 on global warming have been among the most popular
projects
. By looking at the new
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 we can see that many of them are just using
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global warming using different statistics. While these are not the researches that must be funded because the issue of global warming already exists and government may provide
money
 and facility for those that are the probable solutions. In spite of giving financial support for more scientific research, more funds can be given to
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graduate
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 it may increase the
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 student's
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 with higher quality as many of
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 bigger and form what's called scientific problem. So
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. The key point is that in an overall view the number of
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 are way bigger than
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 project as
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 and
also
 mostly are more complex. So the probability of success in the
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scientific
projects
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researches
. With regard to that number
also
 the government should provide more
money
 for useful
projects
.
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