With a fast pace of morden life, more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

It is true that nowadays many people are too busy to cook at home and
inevitavbly
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inevitably
switch to fast
food
as an alternative. According to me,
this
trend, though, seems
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an advantage
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advantage
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,
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but
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it
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is
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it
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has some
disadvantage
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as well
First
and foremost, the reason why residents
chooses
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junk
food
is that it will convenient.
This
is because tasty and
save
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time for busy people to them buy that.
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Moreover
Morever
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, cooking
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a meal
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meal
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is so complicated for people
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live
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on their own
is
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and is
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more priced than fast
food
.
For instance
, if someone to cook they
needs
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to go
supermaket
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supermarket
to buy raw material after that need to know to cook it will take so much time and energy.
However
, using fast
food
have a lot of
drawback
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. One of
big
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drawback
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is being overweight. Usually,
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the nutrients
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of
food
include a high amount of sugar, oil and chemicals to make them look tasty.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
, gaining weight make your health become worse. According to
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researchers
rearchers
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researchers
, in
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America
Ameriaca
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America
, the children’s body not to be healthy and fit In conclusion, fast
food
have
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advantage
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and are
outweight
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outweighed
by its disadvantage.
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Howerver
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However
, having it a few times for a change of taste is fine, and the
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home-cooked
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home cooked
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meal provides proper nutrients to the body.
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