Some TV programmes, videos of violent games and other leisure activities are harmful to children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

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Stanley, I am writing to inform you that I cannot start my new job as a software engineer

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week because of some circumstances. As you know when we had an interview I said that

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I am living in another city (Liverpool),

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I need

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a ticket for

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Sunday airlines but today I received an email from them about flight

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due to some problems. The main problem is that my flight was declined due to weather conditions and it was transferred to the

day. In

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will be on Friday evening. I suppose that I can start my job

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week on Monday. I would like to

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for my late arrival due to

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situation. I look forward to hearing you. Best Regards, Ruslan Almukhanov

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

146 words

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Some TV programmes, videos of violent games and other leisure activities are harmful to children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

Fully explain your ideas

The most important of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?.

Directors of large organisations receive much higher salaries than ordinary workers. Some think it is necessary, while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •Give details of your purchase •Describe the problem •Explain why you need a replacement urgently

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?