Some TV programmes, videos of violent games and other leisure activities are harmful to children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

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Stanley, I am writing to inform you that I cannot start my new job as a software engineer

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for my late arrival due to

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Some TV programmes, videos of violent games and other leisure activities are harmful to children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problems?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Television has diminished the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Q. In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?