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Your friend has been offered a place on course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email: -Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university -Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation -warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Mike, How're you, my friend? We haven't met each other since we got together
last
 year. Hope everything is OK at your end. I have just checked your email and I am glad to give you some tips about finding a place to accommodate in. Well, I have resided in the university's dormitory for 4 years. The accommodation was quite comfortable and
cozy
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;
however
, there were a few drawbacks
such
 as most learners
share
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 the same bathroom. So, I did various precautions regarding
the
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personal hygiene to avoid any contamination. Let me add that, there are several platforms to check residences during
this
 period. One of them is surfing the official page of
college
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the college
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, which has posted
plenous
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plenteous
 advertisements on
this
 topic. Another one to consider is the registrar's office, whose representatives are in contact with real estate offices.
Hence
, I believe that you should exert an effort to find something suitable. In a nutshell, I look forward to hearing updates from you. It will be great to check the reviews and ratings of
residence
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 before making
decision
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. The aforementioned statement is the most common mistake among students in the contemporary epoch. Love, Mohamed
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