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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back.

#restaurant #manager #money
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know I am thoroughly dissatisfied with your restaurant's service and staff. I booked a table for 10 people two weeks in advance as I was going to play host to my new business contacts in a convivial atmosphere
last
 night .When we arrived, I was told that there was not any table big enough for us to sit all together. As I was going to discuss the terms and conditions of the deal with my guests while dining, I was totally disappointed by
this
 news.
In addition
 to
this
, not only it took ages that us to get our order but
also
 the dish was cold when we got it. I felt even more displeased when the staff refused to let me get in touch with management to express my dissatisfaction . To conclude, I would like to register my request for a refund of a payment as the quality of service was not acceptable at all and ,
moreover
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 I highly recommend you take decisive action in order that
this
 does not occur again to your customers. Best regards, Razieh Ahmadi
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