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Society would benefit from complete ban on all forms of advertisements. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#society #ban #forms #advertisements
In today's contemporary world, the concept of advertisement is crucial for numerous brands. While some believe certain
commercials
 can be useful for
people
, others argue that cancelling every
types
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 of
advertisements
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advertisement
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 are beneficial for society. I completely agree with the
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argument
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. In
this
 essay, I explain my view with examples.
Firstly
, according to some individuals, television
commercials
 are a great source of information for elderly
people
. Due to their lack of technological abilities, the best way of illustrating some the-state-of-art gadgets to older
people
 is those soap-opera breaks.
For example
, a survey
that
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conducted by Yale University in 2018 shows that an elder law attorney
called
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 many times by old persons after his television commercial video.
Additionally
, If popular retail companies gave
less announcement
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 on tv,
people
 would be less aware of important discounts which provide economical
affects
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.
However
, if society
get
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 rid of every
forms
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form
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 of
advertisements
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advertisement
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, the production quality and prices will be better. Cable channel
commercials
 are filmed
ways
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in ways
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 of misguiding. If there were
less
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advertisements
 for
an
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expensive and
disfunctioning
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dysfunctioning
 shoes,
persons
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people
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 would choose
better produced
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 and comfortable shoes
instead
. A study that
revealed
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was revealed
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 in 2017 by Nike showed
,
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 customers purchase sneakers that were used in youth drama series. In order to maintain decent
assessments
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one
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businesses
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 authorities have to ban
commercials
. I think that decision makes up great outcomes. To sum up,
although
 some sort of television-based informational
commercials
 might provide useful information for a certain group, a society without
advertisements
 will be well balanced.
Also
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people
 can reach
best
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the best
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manufacturing
manufactoring
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manufacturing
 goods.
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