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The increase number of vehicles causes the problem of traffic congestion, especially in big cities, leading to various problems faced by people every day. What are these problems and suggest way to resolve them.

#vehicles #traffic #congestion #cities #people
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contemporary
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 epoch, the
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numbers
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 of
vehicles
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 have increased leading to
traffic
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jams
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brings
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 umpteen issues,
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people
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's daily lives in metros.
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with the
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 issue in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, it is evidentially seen that,
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 in the
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 of
vehicles
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 directly affect
people
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 to reach to their work destination. To explain,
people
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 often waste their precious hours stuck in
traffic
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jams
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 which might impact their personal and professional lives.
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recent
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a recent
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 survey done in big
MNC
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MNCs
 in big cities
have
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 shown that 60% of working professional refuse to work in office premises on daily basis because of excessive time
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 in
congestions
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. Apart from
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, Frequent
traffic
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jams
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causes
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air
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pollution
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 which is one of the biggest reason for global warming. To elaborate,
increased
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 number of
vehicles
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greater
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amount
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 of
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air
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 resulting in
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a rise
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rise
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air
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pollution
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 and
thus
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 global warming.
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, it is seen that glaciers in
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 are melting rapidly because of increased
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pollution
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 and global warming Well, To overcome the
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 issues,
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 and authorities can inspire citizens to have maximum use of public transport. It will directly affect the
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numbers
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 of
vehicles
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 on the road which may lead to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
traffic
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 congestion. Probing ahead, tress
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 should be encouraged in greater
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 among
public
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 in the country to fight against
air
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pollution
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 and to resist against
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the effect
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effect
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 of global warming. To conclude, increased
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 or
traffic
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jams
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, are
men made
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 issues which can be
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 properly if managed in
a
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idea
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 way and if
people
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 understand
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with
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sense
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 of responsibility towards biodiversity and mother earth.
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