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The increase number of vehicles causes the problem of traffic congestion, especially in big cities, leading to various problems faced by people every day. What are these problems and suggest way to resolve them.

#vehicles #traffic #congestion #cities #people
In
contemporary
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 epoch, the
numbers
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number
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 of
vehicles
 have increased leading to
traffic
jams
 which
brings
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 umpteen issues,
altered
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and altered
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people
's daily lives in metros.
This
 essay will discuss the causative factors and remedial solutions to cope
up
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with the
above said
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 issue in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, it is evidentially seen that,
boon
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a boon
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 in the
numbers
 of
vehicles
 directly affect
people
 to reach to their work destination. To explain,
people
 often waste their precious hours stuck in
traffic
jams
 which might impact their personal and professional lives.
For Instance
,
recent
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a recent
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 survey done in big
MNC
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MNCs
 in big cities
have
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 shown that 60% of working professional refuse to work in office premises on daily basis because of excessive time
consume
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 in
congestions
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congestion
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. Apart from
this
, Frequent
traffic
jams
causes
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air
pollution
 which is one of the biggest reason for global warming. To elaborate,
increased
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an increased
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 number of
vehicles
 release
greater
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a greater
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amount
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amounts
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 of
carbons
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carbon
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in
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air
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the air
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 resulting in
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a rise
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rise
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 in
air
pollution
 and
thus
 global warming.
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, it is seen that glaciers in
Himalayas
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the Himalayas
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 are melting rapidly because of increased
air
pollution
 and global warming Well, To overcome the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 issues,
government
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the government
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 and authorities can inspire citizens to have maximum use of public transport. It will directly affect the
numbers
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number
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 of
vehicles
 on the road which may lead to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
traffic
 congestion. Probing ahead, tress
plantation
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plantations
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 should be encouraged in greater
numbers
 among
public
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the public
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 in the country to fight against
air
pollution
 and to resist against
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the effect
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effect
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effects
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 of global warming. To conclude, increased
vehicles
 or
traffic
jams
, are
men made
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men-made
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 issues which can be
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tackled
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tackle
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 properly if managed in
a
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idea
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ideal
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 way and if
people
 understand
their
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with
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sense
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a sense
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 of responsibility towards biodiversity and mother earth.
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