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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #salaries #ceos #executives #workers
Energy can neither be created nor it can be destroyed,
however
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 the
resources
 that we use to harness energy from, are getting depleted at an alarming rate.
Hence
corporation
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corporations
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 and countries are searching for them in
the
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areas which are not
discovered
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 yet. I completely disagree with
the
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 view. On one
hand
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non renewable
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resources
 are the
resources
, that are responsible for the revolution in
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the field
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field
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fields
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 of science and technology, transportation,
Industralisation
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Industrialisation
, etc. On the
other
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 they are the main cause of global warming in today's world.
Instead
 of searching for them in unknown lands, we should focus our work
in
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on
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 finding the alternative
of
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to
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 these
resources
.
For example
, electricity the
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lifeline
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life line
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 of today's world was primarily obtained by burning oil and gases, which released
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases in large
quantity
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quantities
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thus
 harming the environment in the process.
However
, after the introduction of solar
panel
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panels
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 and wind turbines, not only the
emmission
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emission
 of these gases are controlled, but the amount required to use the luxury of electricity is
also
 reduced.
Thus
 focusing time and energy on finding alternatively, is the best choice. Despite of
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harmful
harmfull
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harmful
effect
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effects
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 of these
resources
, they are still very important for the smooth
functionality
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 of the system.
Furthermore
,
there
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 usage cannot be revoked immediately.
For example
, yes we can replace
resources
 used in electricity
from
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 renewable
resources
, but we are yet to find the alternative
of
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 petrol,
diseal
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diesel
,etc. All points considered, we should continue our search for
resources
 like oil and gas, while trying to find the alternative for the same.
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  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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