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In the advertising, businesses nowdays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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At present, marketing is the main tool of every company to attract
customers
. Almost all the brands in their advertising claim that they are offering completely new
products
 than anything previously available in the market. In
this
 essay, I will examine
this
 approach of different
companies
 and provide my opinion.
Firstly
,
companies
 think
customers
 will pay more attention towards their
products
 and actually buy them if that particular
product
 is offering very unique
features
 which no other
product
 can offer.
That is
 not correct, customer will buy
products
 if the
product
 actually fulfill requirements.
Secondly
, sometimes
companies
 imagine by showing, again and again, the same thing to
customers
 will engrain the benefits or
features
 of that particular
product
 in the mind of
customers
 even though in reality these
features
 might not be available in the
product
.
That is
also
 false, by watching
this
 kind of advertisement
customers
 can buy any particular
product
 for one time but after using it they will not buy it again. He can
also
 share his bad experience with his or her friends and ask them to not buy that
product
. In conclusion, nowadays
customers
 are more aware of
products
 than ever before.
This
 awareness in
customers
 is because of an enormous amount of advertising. I my opinion, if
companies
 focus more on
product
 quality and actual benefits for
customers
 rather than just showing them new
features
 which are only gimmicks that will benefit them more and their customer base will be increased.
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