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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society.

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Whether it is advantageous to alter jobs or to remain attached to the same company throughout the life for advantage of the individual and the rest is a debatable issue,
this
 essay will juxtapose both views as perused
further
.
Firstly
, a number of people believe that by changing a post one can get a different set of roles and responsibilities
such
 that implicitly they will be having more opportunities for learning and development.
Furthermore
, they believe that their salary will be commensurate with their level of experience in various firms,
hence
such
 people can earn more, which abridge their financial goals and they enjoy early benefits.
However
, it can be deleterious effects on your physical and mental fitness as a person have to put in hefty effort into relocation and adjustment to a new environment every time.
On the other hand
, working with the same establishment aids the person in many ways, like they will feel working in their comfort zone since they are loyal to the employer
hence
 in turn, they will enjoy job security,
moreover
, they are
also
 conversant with company’s way of working
hence
 they can take effective decisions keeping establishment’s interest at priority.
Secondly
, employees who work a long time in the same place tend to get more opportunities for promotion and are likely to get a place in higher management.
For example
, our ex-CEO of the corporation joined as a trainee which is the lowest position and
then
 excel so well that he retired from the highest position of the company as a CEO
this
 gives him a sense of a satisfactory work career. In conclusion, folk who required job security and job satisfaction may remain in the same firm throughout their career,
on the contrary
 Individuals who want to gain quick financial benefits and want more learning and development should change jobs.
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