Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that

history

is one of the most important school

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opinion

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this

statement and

people

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21st

century Science and Technology are more

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necessary

neccessary

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necessary

subjects. From my point of view, I strongly disagree that sci-tech subjects are in the

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place. In

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I will give

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my opinion and provide information about both views. On the one hand, Science and Technology are vital to our future development.

Moreover

, new discoverings about

people

's health,

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, technics will provide big benefits to life conditions.

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, if these subjects are included in

school

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curriculum, there will be more

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, who are interested in

this

field.

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, there will appear specialists which are trying to make new things

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observation.

On the other hand

, scientists will make a lot of mistakes if they do not learn

history

. In the past

people

firstly

started something new and tried to do various experiments, that eventually end up with tragic stories.

Therefore

, scientists should avoid repeating events and for

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results

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result

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they could look at

history

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, according to research about

scientists

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scientists'

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achievements,

people

can understand that they, before starting a discovery, looked for information about the sphere they were working and their main source was

history

. To conclude, science and technology are important to learn,

although

the meaning of

history

should not be ignored. It is better to know what happened in the past to not

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mistakes in discovering.

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Cultural heritage
Historical perspective
Analytical skills
Contextual understanding
Technological advancements
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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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