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Band 5

The best way for the government to solve traffic congestion is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic
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 congestion is one important problem that many counties face.
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, whether the
government
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 should provide free
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public
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pubic
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public
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traffic
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 transportation all the
days
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 is a controversial issue. In my opinion, I disagree with that mind. With economic
developed
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, more and more cities have
traffic
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 congestion
problem
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. In
particularly
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, lots of
people
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 need to spend
long
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time
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 on their
way
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 to work
everyday
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. The simple reason is that
people
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 who
living
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 in
this
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 competitive world support
to work
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 very hard. To resolve
this
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 issue, some
people
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 believe that the
government
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 should provide
free
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 public
traffic
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 system every single day. Meanwhile, free
traffic
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 can definitely promote some
people
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 to change their lifestyle,
such
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 as by bus
instead
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 of driving their own car to work. We cannot ignore they will cost more
time
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 on their
way
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. So driving
own
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their own
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 car is
more
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a more
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convenient
convinent
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convenient
way
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 if they want to save
time
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.
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, if the
government
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 spend more money on
public
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the public
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traffic
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 system, they have to reduce
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 in
other item
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another item
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,
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, education and medication are
also
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 very important things for the
government
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.
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, if
the
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public
traffic
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 transport is not free,
people
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 will make a good decision to choose whether they need to change their
traffic
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 method
depends
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 on their
times
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time
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. At the same
time
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,
people
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 can
also
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 think about how to save fuel
consume
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 on their
way
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.
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, the
government
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 could improve the infrastructure
such
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 as
expand
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 high-
way
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 or
increase
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increasing
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 job opportunities
at
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in
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 urban
area
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areas
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instead
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providing
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of providing
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 free public
traffic
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 transport. In conclusion, the
government
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 should spend money on suitable
place
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places
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, since all the
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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need
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 all kinds of
societies
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 services.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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