IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2

solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use. There are 2 main fuels for that: air and water. Give your oppinion what is the best way to receive the energy and make comparisons where relevant.

#panels #electricity #fuels #air #water #oppinion #energy #comparisons
The scheme shows the way
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
how solar panels work in order to provide
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
electricity to
Add an article
the household
a household
show examples
household
Fix the agreement mistake
households
show examples
.
Owerall
Correct your spelling
Overall
, there is one main constructional
Correct your spelling
principle
princip
Correct your spelling
principle
 that can be used for setting up
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the solar mechanism.
However
, the absorbing element can be different,
for
example
Add a comma
,example
show examples
 it can be
air
 or
water
.
First
 of all, the typical construction of the solar box contains three key elements: transparent top and input and
outpit
Correct your spelling
output
 holes. Using that scheme,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
solar power can be absorbed and converted into electricity by
air
 or by
water
. As for the
air
-based solar box, the
sun
Change noun form
sun's
show examples
 rays heat the
air
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
contained inside it while the heating process a warmed
air
 goes out through an outlet.
As a result
,
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
energy for domestic use appears.
On the other hand
, the
water
-based solar box contains
water
 inside. The difference is that
water
circulate
Change the verb form
circulates
show examples
Correct your spelling
inside
insidde
Correct your spelling
inside
special
Correct article usage
a special
show examples
water
 pipe. After
heating
Add a comma
,heating
show examples
 it
Correct your spelling
goes
goeas
Correct your spelling
goes
 out through the
Correct your spelling
outlet
show examples
outled
Correct your spelling
outlet
show examples
 and
converted
Add a missing verb
is converted
show examples
 into
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
energy.
Submitted by snake_shoulders on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: