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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, many people believe that accepting a negative situation is beneficial,
while
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 others argue that improving themselves might
leads
Wrong verb form
lead

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb leads. Consider changing it.

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 to
a
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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better ways. In the following paragraph, both of
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this view
Fix the agreement mistake
these views

It seems that this view may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 will be discussed in detail. People, nowadays, have to face various
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun situations in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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bad situations and move on.
For example
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, they've got some bad speech which
make
Change the verb form
makes

The plural verb make does not appear to agree with the singular subject some bad speech. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 them lose their confidence. How should they deal
itwith
Correct your spelling
with
it with

If you don’t want itwith to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

? Many of them are forced to accept these affairs because they are unsure how to
themhandle
Correct your spelling
the handle
them handle

If you don’t want themhandle to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

. It can help them get through
this
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 awful circumstance even though nothing will be better.
On the other hand
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, others advised them to correct their mistakes rather than accepting their faults and doing nothing. If they know how to fix themself as fast as they know, everything certainly going to be better.
For instance
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, if you
failed
Wrong verb form
fail

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb failed. Consider changing it.

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 from math test but you still doing nothing
instead
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 of trying to do more about math problems, your score won't be better.
This
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 is
due to
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 the reasons why many people have to try and solve their life problems. As far as I am concerned,
personally
Add a comma
personally,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase personally. Consider adding a comma.

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 I can see the point
about accept
Change preposition
of accepting

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 a bad situation, but if you do not know anything to improve
such
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 a bad circumstance,
so
Correct word choice
apply

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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I firmly agree that trying to improve yourself in a bad situation is the best way to brings you to better target.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and contributes to the overall argument. Incoherent sentences or off-topic points lower the score.
Task Achievement
Clearly address all parts of the essay question. Develop and support the main ideas with relevant examples and explanations.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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