Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, many people believe that accepting a negative situation is beneficial,

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others argue that improving themselves might

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better ways. In the following paragraph, both of

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will be discussed in detail. People, nowadays, have to face various

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bad situations and move on.

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, they've got some bad speech which

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them lose their confidence. How should they deal

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? Many of them are forced to accept these affairs because they are unsure how to

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awful circumstance even though nothing will be better.

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, others advised them to correct their mistakes rather than accepting their faults and doing nothing. If they know how to fix themself as fast as they know, everything certainly going to be better.

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from math test but you still doing nothing

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of trying to do more about math problems, your score won't be better.

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the reasons why many people have to try and solve their life problems. As far as I am concerned,

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I can see the point

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a bad situation, but if you do not know anything to improve

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a bad circumstance,

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I firmly agree that trying to improve yourself in a bad situation is the best way to brings you to better target.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and contributes to the overall argument. Incoherent sentences or off-topic points lower the score.

Task Achievement

Clearly address all parts of the essay question. Develop and support the main ideas with relevant examples and explanations.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

233 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adversity
resilience
stoicism
contentment
cope
adapt
endure
persevere
settle
ambition
tenacious
determined
resourceful
optimistic
self-improvement
proactive
initiative
transform
overcome
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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an satisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that mental health is the most important factor for success in sports. However, some others believe that it is more important to have strong and fit people. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Some people think books are lossing their importance in information and entertainment purposes.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.