television has destroyed communicatio among friends and family. Do you agree and disagreewith the statement above? Give advantages and disadvantages of the t.v . include relevenmt example as well.

In today's era, technology has blessed
people
with many gadgets. Television is one of them. Some masses think that it is a source of entertainment.
However
, few believe that it has ruined communication between kith and kin. To some ,extent I agree with
this
notion.I shall put my views below regarding
this
phenomenon.
To begin
with, I am giving some reasons why I agree with
this
statement.A few decades ago,when
people
have no
such
equipments
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equipment
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, they spent their time with their near and dear.But because of enhancements in technology masses remain busy with gadgets.
Consequently
, it reduces the get-together as well. On the flip side, there are many advantages of TV.
Firstly
, it provides information about new products available in the market.
Secondly
,the news channels keep
people
up-to-date about their surroundings . To exemplify , in 2012 , when terrorists attacked the Taj Mahal.
public
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the public
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came to know about
this
through TV media which saved many
community's
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lives.
On the contrary
, there are some demerits of television. Some folk become
addicts
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to serials and
they
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started copying them.
For instance
, in 2002, a pupil in America killed 2 students as he was influenced by a movie.
Moreover
, the media provided more wrong information than actual so that they can promote their channels. To put it in a nutshell, as every garden has weeds, television
also
has some demerits.
People
can take more
benefits
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benefit
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from it if parents put some control
on
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their offspring regarding the shows and channels they should watch and government should check the news
first
which is going to be telecast.
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