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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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Two
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 maps are illustrating the development of the City hospital in 2007 and 2010. They are three differences between the
two
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 years they are adding
two
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 roundabouts at
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 ends of the hospital
road
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, making a new public car park and building a
bus
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 station . In
two
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 intersections of the hospital
road
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 with the ring
road
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 in the north and city
road
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 in the ,south there are building
two
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 roundabouts in 2010 .
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 , there is a public car park in the east of the city hospital near the ring
road
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 the entrance of it being from the ring
road
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. staff car park being separate for staff and its entrance is from the ring
road
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 . In 2010 ,
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 of the
bus
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 ,stop we have a
bus
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 station west of the hospital
road
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 and it have access to
two
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 roundabouts at the ends of the hospital
road
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.so
that is
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 the cause for removing
bus
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 stops.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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