1.You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.

Dear Karen, Hope you're doing well. I'm writing

this

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letter to invite you to join a vacation with me in Bangkok

Thailand

Punctuation problem

, Thailand

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. The reason

why

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apply

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I have to invite you,

because

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that

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my brother is unable to attend

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apply

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this

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trip with me. My brother and I booked a flight ticket and accommodation for our short holiday.

This

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is 5

days

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5-day

nights

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4-night

trip in Bangkok.Our trips will be

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from

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25 November to 1st of December. The flight time will be at 3pm from Melbourne Airport to Bangkok Airport. I was shocked and disappointed

that

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when

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received

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I received

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a message from my brother. He informed me that he has a very important business meeting in Hong Kong needs to attend,and

also

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his boss would like him to stay in Hong Kong for another 2 days. Since 2019, we

are

Wrong verb form

have been

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unable to meet each other

due to

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our busy working

lifestyle

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lifestyles

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. Today, I would like to invite you to come on

this

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vacation with me, so that we can have a good time catching up together. Looking forward to hearing back shortly. Kind Regards, Yumi

yumiwong1212123

Oct 11, 2022

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content

Add more detail on the plan. Write a simple day by day plan and places to see.

grammar

Fix small grammar and spelling. Use clear and short sentences.

structure

Split the letter into 3 simple blocks: a greeting, a short news part, then the plan and invite, then a closing.

clarity

Be clear on why your brother cannot come in one simple line.

tone

Kind and warm tone that fits a friend letter.

content

Key parts are in the letter: reason, invite, and close.

content

Dates and travel details are given.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

180 words

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brother
reason
work
cannot
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trip
place
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beach
hotel
room
budget
cost
share
plan
days
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ticket
market
food
water
swim
walk
island
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weather
sun
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please
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