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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or services (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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 main reason by some people when they buy
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somethings
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something
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 or get some
services
,
although
 others argue quality should be the most important for them due to numerous cases. I agree with the former view. On one hand, all people are aware that economic downturn leads to goods and
services
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.
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, most merchants are finding the solution to reduce
cost
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 of
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a product
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product
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products
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 or
service
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services
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, it affects
buyer
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buyers
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 when they buy
it
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. A good illustration of
this
 is certain merchants cheat
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 fake
product
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products
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 or low quality.
In addition
 to
this
, certain
service
 providers have bad manner
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 someone who
get
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 the
service
.
As a result
, both reasons are what makes commoners demand quality
first
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 expensive.
On the other hand
,
most
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 population in the world cannot afford expensive products or
services
.
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, they are finding anything cheaper
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they can afford
even
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it
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 has
risk
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a risk
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 to receive fraudulent or ineffective goods
or
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 bad
manner
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. Since they think it can use and satisfy when
receive
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 it.
Moreover
, those who have
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a solution
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solution
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 to solve
this
 problem by building a community share
review
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 of the
product
 or
service
 to advise a man to buy them.
Furthermore
, a number of merchants use these communities to advertise their products or
services
. To conclude, most of the
populations
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 on
the
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Earth prefer
product
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products
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 or
service
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services
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 of which
the
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cost
is
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as
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 cheaper as they can afford and
current
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 economic forces them to save their money for
emergency
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an emergency
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case
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 or provide
to
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 their family members.
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